Thursday, December 2, 2010

In the Wind



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The vortex tears through the landscape, ripping apart everything in its unspoken need to feed oblivion. Objects passing by mere blurs in peripheral vision, though the roar in the air remains a deafening constant. Occasionally, there's a momentary scream, piercing and mercifully brief. He's labeled the ones higher in pitch as "children," and he'd be pained to learn how accurate the connection is. His muscles are exhausted; there are no calories left to burn. But he's holding on with fingers locked. He's no idea what foundation the metal… read more @ Panoramic Mindscapes

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8 comments:

  1. The vortex feeding oblivion is a stark image. I like the fact that he can give in and appreciate the wind. Not sure about lives flashing in front of other people's eyes.

    However, really like the conceit of riding the wind to the other side.

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  2. Blogger Harnett-Hargrove said...

    I like this a lot. Realize the literal aspect of it, however, still can't get 'After you jump and before you land is god', out.
    Or, about jumping into the (very busy) void.
    - Absolutely sure about 'everyone's life flashing before his eyes.' -J

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  3. Sounds like a perfect description of a cold to me. "He doesn't know who the body belongs to and doesn't really care", is a perfect description of how I feel just now.

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  4. This reads like a Dreamscape to me. As always the writing is superb, but the images are just a little too nightmarish for me.

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  5. Tragically romantic but you've nailed it.

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  6. too right, a romantic to the end...ironic coming from a stone cold bachelor

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  7. i do like the close and the hopeful ring to the words...intriguing vignette jeff...

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