Tuesday, November 17, 2009

Symphony

There's a song between breaths
Lyrics, subtle
from respiratory winds
heard only with dying thoughts
and remembered with fading dreams
Truth escaped your breath
Words, false
from lying winds
believed only with loving hearts
and held with longing embrace
An orchestra tires of the song
and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

16 comments:

  1. sounds like you need a new maestro...

    agree, the last line rings a true note...

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  2. That last line got me as well...

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  3. People should learn from that last line.

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  4. Strong writing, although it saddens me that innocence is taken and then destroyed. Well done!

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  5. the less said, the less I'm wrong...

    wow.
    love the sentiment and how you deliver it.

    love love your take. :)

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  6. Oh how this resinates the feelings I have around my mother's recent passing.

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  7. Nice! And I agree with the others as well as you on the last line, too.

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  8. That is a brilliant last line. Really beautiful.

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  9. "...respiratory winds." Great image.

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  10. I really liked the “heard only with dying thoughts // and remembered with fading dreams” -- very well write poem. I'd applaud you, but the internet is in the way.

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  11. You combined simplicity with elegance and wrote a beautiful piece ...... 'the less I've said, the less I'm wrong' is profound.

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  12. Powerful parting lines, combining the complex simplicity of words left to be remembered... You will be greatly missed.

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  13. An orchestra tires of the song
    and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

    Way to go!

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